When returning to look at my first draft, it was super helpful to see comments that my peers and I made compared to my final draft. In my first draft, the first change that I made was the thesis statement. I remember writing this before I had completed all of my body paragraphs, so my thesis statement was very vague and lacking substance. I wrote, “Using examples, also, from Carol Dweck’s TED talk “The Power of Believing You Can Improve,” Greg Lukianoff and Jonathan Haidt’s essay “The Coddling of the American Mind,” and Jefferey Scheuer’s article “Critical Thinking and the Liberal Arts,” we can understand that HR 40 isn’t being passed out of fear and ignorance.” In my final draft, it was changed to, “Also, by comparing Coates’ ideas to Carol Dweck’s TED talk “The Power of Believing You Can Improve,” Greg Lukianoff and Jonathan Haidt’s essay “The Coddling of the American Mind,” and Jefferey Scheuer’s article “Critical Thinking and the Liberal Arts,” we can understand that HR 40 isn’t passing due to fixed mindsets, catastrophization, and poor citizenship.” This is a small change but has a significant effect on framing the rest of the essay. By looking at my first draft, I realized that I can continue to develop my skills and hopefully fast-track the mistakes I made in the first place.